Chat about Scars Stuffs
- Soran Nightblade
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Chat about Scars Stuffs
Hmm, this seems like a good idea to do at the time
Anyhoo, yup, if anyone has ideas or comments or suggestions or requests for fanservice re: Scars, feel free! I'd love advice, feel free to nitpick or recommend changes in style/content/so forth as long as you're tactful (I'm so delicate
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Ok, story time.
So Kyosuke is helping me with a paragraph in Scars 7 that has too many pronouns and confused him.
I replace the pronouns with proper names.
He notes that now there are too many Rhen's and Rone's.
I change it again to be a combination of both. Then...
Hyperzorch (2:03:30 AM): lol I might have made it worse
Jian Hei Long (2:03:57 AM): bah, now i think Rhen kicked himself in the chest
Jian Hei Long (2:04:00 AM): jk
Hyperzorch (2:04:13 AM): hahhahahahaha
Hyperzorch (2:04:20 AM): *falls out of chair*
Jian Hei Long (2:04:24 AM): *sweatdrops*
Hyperzorch (2:04:26 AM): hahahahahhaahhaaha
Hyperzorch (2:04:38 AM): hahahaahaa
Jian Hei Long (2:04:48 AM): ^^;;;
Hyperzorch (2:04:54 AM): o_o
Hyperzorch (2:04:56 AM): hahaha
Jian Hei Long (2:04:56 AM): i think i broke her
Hyperzorch (2:04:57 AM): aaahahahahah
Jian Hei Long (2:08:07 AM): *sweatdrops* are you ok now?
Jian Hei Long (2:08:20 AM): uh oh, i think i killed her...
Jian Hei Long (2:08:25 AM): *shifty eyes*
Jian Hei Long (2:08:45 AM): *drags you off into a dark room*
Jian Hei Long (2:14:43 AM): erm, ikiteru?
Hyperzorch (2:15:15 AM): ..............................IKITEIRU!
Jian Hei Long (2:15:33 AM): oh erm... *puts clothing back on and retreats from dark room*
Jian Hei Long (2:15:48 AM): *shifty eyes again*
Hyperzorch (2:15:49 AM): lol
Jian Hei Long (2:16:13 AM): did you really laugh that hard at what i said?
Hyperzorch (2:17:36 AM): yes
Hyperzorch (2:17:40 AM): lol
Jian Hei Long (2:17:46 AM): ^^;;;
Hyperzorch (2:17:52 AM): because i got a mental image
Hyperzorch (2:17:58 AM): of Rhenkicking himself in the chest
Jian Hei Long (2:18:03 AM): hehe
Jian Hei Long (2:20:07 AM): now i expect a picture of that mental image
And thus.....this was born

So Kyosuke is helping me with a paragraph in Scars 7 that has too many pronouns and confused him.
I replace the pronouns with proper names.
He notes that now there are too many Rhen's and Rone's.
I change it again to be a combination of both. Then...
Hyperzorch (2:03:30 AM): lol I might have made it worse
Jian Hei Long (2:03:57 AM): bah, now i think Rhen kicked himself in the chest
Jian Hei Long (2:04:00 AM): jk
Hyperzorch (2:04:13 AM): hahhahahahaha
Hyperzorch (2:04:20 AM): *falls out of chair*
Jian Hei Long (2:04:24 AM): *sweatdrops*
Hyperzorch (2:04:26 AM): hahahahahhaahhaaha
Hyperzorch (2:04:38 AM): hahahaahaa
Jian Hei Long (2:04:48 AM): ^^;;;
Hyperzorch (2:04:54 AM): o_o
Hyperzorch (2:04:56 AM): hahaha
Jian Hei Long (2:04:56 AM): i think i broke her
Hyperzorch (2:04:57 AM): aaahahahahah
Jian Hei Long (2:08:07 AM): *sweatdrops* are you ok now?
Jian Hei Long (2:08:20 AM): uh oh, i think i killed her...
Jian Hei Long (2:08:25 AM): *shifty eyes*
Jian Hei Long (2:08:45 AM): *drags you off into a dark room*
Jian Hei Long (2:14:43 AM): erm, ikiteru?
Hyperzorch (2:15:15 AM): ..............................IKITEIRU!
Jian Hei Long (2:15:33 AM): oh erm... *puts clothing back on and retreats from dark room*
Jian Hei Long (2:15:48 AM): *shifty eyes again*
Hyperzorch (2:15:49 AM): lol
Jian Hei Long (2:16:13 AM): did you really laugh that hard at what i said?
Hyperzorch (2:17:36 AM): yes
Hyperzorch (2:17:40 AM): lol
Jian Hei Long (2:17:46 AM): ^^;;;
Hyperzorch (2:17:52 AM): because i got a mental image
Hyperzorch (2:17:58 AM): of Rhenkicking himself in the chest
Jian Hei Long (2:18:03 AM): hehe
Jian Hei Long (2:20:07 AM): now i expect a picture of that mental image
And thus.....this was born
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Yes, Rhen is...uh... doublejointed! ..did I forget to mention that?
Actually I was wondering, if anyone gets a chance to read it, if the end part of part 7 made sense. I attempted not to overexplain what happened with Rone and the secretary, but if that made it confusing, let me know. The idea was that Rone fired her for giving Cerno the file where Rhen's old nickname was written along with the rest of his personal history. And...is the story 'working'?
Actually I was wondering, if anyone gets a chance to read it, if the end part of part 7 made sense. I attempted not to overexplain what happened with Rone and the secretary, but if that made it confusing, let me know. The idea was that Rone fired her for giving Cerno the file where Rhen's old nickname was written along with the rest of his personal history. And...is the story 'working'?
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